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Karen inspires me to put up here something that I wrote recently while waiting for a friend. :) I don't usually do poetry and I have spent a little time working on the syllables and rhythym but I don't think I technically have meter down.
A smile and a quick glance away
marks the moment of our first contact;
Why am I afraid to convey
the sight of you makes me react;
A smile--oh that smile.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of biting your lip.
A smile prompts me to try to find
the courage to stammer, "Hello";
I wonder if anyone would mind
anyone with the power to just say, "No"'
A smile--oh that smile makes me think of more.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of your hand on my hip.
A smile leads to thoughts so diverse:
how hot it would be if we necked,
the positions we could rehearse,
for with practice our movements we could perfect;
A smile--oh that smile makes me want much more.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of you holding me with your firm grip.
A smile can be only a smile
so I will just blush and demur,
Intensely hoping all the while
that my smile countenance does confer
A smile--oh that smile...
I'm longing for more than just your smile.
A smile and a quick glance away
marks the moment of our first contact;
Why am I afraid to convey
the sight of you makes me react;
A smile--oh that smile.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of biting your lip.
A smile prompts me to try to find
the courage to stammer, "Hello";
I wonder if anyone would mind
anyone with the power to just say, "No"'
A smile--oh that smile makes me think of more.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of your hand on my hip.
A smile leads to thoughts so diverse:
how hot it would be if we necked,
the positions we could rehearse,
for with practice our movements we could perfect;
A smile--oh that smile makes me want much more.
Your smile taunts me with thoughts of you holding me with your firm grip.
A smile can be only a smile
so I will just blush and demur,
Intensely hoping all the while
that my smile countenance does confer
A smile--oh that smile...
I'm longing for more than just your smile.
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Re: Smile
Mon, March 27, 2006 - 2:12 PMYo! You gots some SKILLZ!
I love your sultry refrain with its consistant rhyme but surprising twists.
(keeping a consistant rhythm and pattern flowing while keeping things exciting)
and then POW... that ending...
"more than just your smile"
y'know... this addresses a sentiment that is floating around...
Perhaps this is my own projection or whatnot,
but its funny how you focus on this "smile"
-which is the "happy face" we put on and that people prefer
sexual suggestiveness aside (including kink)
I think its ENTIRELY erotic when there is suggestion
of wanting a person ENTIRELY
-that is, MORE than just a smile.
It suggests wanting to REALLY know someone.
THAT is what I consider beautiful.
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Re: Smile
Tue, March 28, 2006 - 11:19 PMOh - I know that smile. A smile such as this graces me once a week.
However - what if that smile beams from a face that is not used to smiling?
I have been told recently: "Seeing your smile makes my smile that much bigger," and, "There you go making me smile again."
Receiving/witnessing a smile is heavenly. Causing a smile is a benediction.
Gal, if you see a smile, revel in the fact that you have put it there.
I love your poem, esp. "taunts me with thoughts of biting your lip." Yum!
I also love your play with meter and rhythm.
PS - as a speaker of Spanish, I have to include the loveliness of the Spanish word for smile: "sonrisa."
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Re: Smile
Tue, April 4, 2006 - 12:39 PMsmiles to this wonderful poem and to you!
